Saturday, January 21, 2012

Important you Critique!!!

Hey. So I am writing a book right now. It all started at 4 am when I was cracked on coffee and I wrote what I am about to post. I am actually writing a whole book based on this post- so I want to know what you think of this writing style. Please comment and tell me what you think! 

Enjoy

                Every step was a new torture. Yet she kept going even as the world pushed down. It was nearly over; she knew that now even as she continued.  The worst part was she accepted it.
Every second had led to this; every detail of her seemingly meaningless existence had built up to this moment.  The pain, the torment that now wracked her body, was nothing. Nothing compared to the relief that would soon envelope her.
If only it could come a minute sooner.
She knew the battle still raged around her, but even with the sounds of death and destruction invading her ears her focus could not be broken.  She continued soundlessly, her head held as high as her failing body would allow. She wanted her last moments be ones of pride and glory, though even she knew it would make no difference. 
Then she saw him. He stood out to her among the rest, a candle in the blackest of nights, the star that leads her home again. The moment he registered to her was the moment he looked up- their eyes meeting as if there was nothing else to look at but each other.  The entire world could have ended and she would have been completely oblivious. She knew one thing at that moment and that it was finally over.
A smile broke out upon her parched lips as she saw him move toward her, his mouth forming words her ears would not accept.  Time did not move then, it only stood still as she attempted one more step. But her legs would not have it. The ground came rushing toward her as she fell and she welcomed it.  She had never expected the end to be so peaceful.
And she saw him. Pushing his way through the chaos to her, his face panic stricken as he screamed something.
It was all fading quickly, the agony dissolving as the numbness of death took its place, but before she was lost to the blackness she heard him, only him in a sea of sound.
Liliana!”

Friday, January 20, 2012

Can You Hear Me Out There?

I wrote this at 16 after the summer I had lost all of my close friends and I felt very alone. As you can tell I enjoy depressing poetry. 


Can You Hear Me Out There? 



I gaze through the clouds
Unable to see
I am broken and befreft
Don't you feel
That I yearn for something I'll never have?
Don't you see
That I do not try.
My life is a series of walls
And I am trapped between.
It is a vicious cycle of pain
And there is nothing more.
Breath life into me again
Make it all go away
Will I be myself again?

Monday, January 16, 2012

Certainty

Hey. I wrote this last night :D So here is something new for all of you. I really want to know what you all think because this is the first free form poem I have written in a while. 


Enjoy 


Certainty



A world touched by no one
A place unknown
Even to those who think they do.
A blank canvas
Waiting for the paint.
A blank page
Waiting for the words.
Possibilities are endless
And yet…
Fear hold you back
Struggling to explain why
That first step is the hardest one.
That leap of faith
Which few will ever make
Is scarier than the certainty
Of a timeless demise. 

Sunday, January 15, 2012

Broken Wings

I realize I post there fairly quickly, I just want to actually let people read these. When I wrote these poems I was to self conscious to let people read them. 
Anywho, I was 15 when I wrote this. I had just ended my first real relationship and I guess this is how I felt. Enjoy


 Broken Wings

Falling gently
Because I tried to soar
On a pair of broken wings
That would not support my weight
Any longer.
They had held me up
For so long
With lasting effort
And my wearing soul
But I don't have that strength anymore.
I cannot support myself
On my own.
So my feathers have left me
And my wings have broken
And I fall to earth
... I only await the crash

Best Friends Forever

I was 16 when I wrote this, no real inspiration I remember. This is a lot more innocent then my earlier poems.


Enjoy



Best Friends  Forever

We promised forever
As we laughed together
Splashing playfully in the cool running stream. 
But that seems so long ago.

We said nothing could ever
Break us.
We wouldn’t be split by something stupid
Like arguments and such.

We sat together
Dreaming of lives we’d never have
As we looked
Up into the stars.

We ran forever
Until we could run no more
And we collapsed.
Smiling all along.

We promised we’d never
Forget the stupid promises
Meant to be
Broken.

We grew together
But we seemed to grow
Farther and farther
Apart.

Now it seems like we never
Sat under the stars
Hand in hand
As we said best friends forever. 

Thursday, January 12, 2012

Backstabber

I know a bit more about this one. I was 17 when I wrote this and had a friend who really hurt me. I was feeling very angry and hurt so I lashed out with my words. It was really the only way I knew how at the time. Enjoy 


            Backstabber 



Hideous creatures
Hide behind your perfect mask
A horror only seen
By those who know you best 
So perfect on the outside
Like a star that will never stop it’s shine
But inside it’s a black hole
That swallows anyone who gets too close
You stab at everything I hold dear
And you try to break me apart from the inside out
Liar
Traitor
Cheat
You only do well when you get what you want
And no one else matters.
Backstabber
I hold nothing in any longer
Your blatant lies make me sick
Goodbye   

Wednesday, January 11, 2012

Always By My Side

This is kinda just depressing. I can't remember why I wrote it or when I did- though I think I was 14... >>  This is making me feel old. Enjoy



Are you really here for good or will I
Lose you too.
Will good things fade with time like they
Always do?
You need to promise me, make me

Believe
You will never leave.

Maybe you will convince me
You only have one chance

Stay with me
Influence me that you won’t leave
Don’t let me lose
Everything I hold dear….

And that is you